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    dots Submission Name: Throw Awaydots
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    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 676
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 765



    Description:
       Need suggestions for this slow rolling "ballad". The music type is somewhat metal, but with bright guitars and high pitch bass line.

    Thank you in advance.

    ( Fixed "The the griefful tears" -> "All the grieffull tears" )


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThrow Awaydots
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    [Interlude]

    Throw away
    Cold 'n' fear
    I'm holdin' ye me dear
    The new era is near

    [Bridge]

    There is no need to feel ashamed
    The new dawn of man has arrived

    [Verse 1]

    After the storm is gone
    Lead us to the new home
    Free of war and tears
    Us winning our timeless fears

    [Chorus]

    Throw away
    Throw away
    All the griefful tears
    Throw away all your fears
    Whispering to your ears

    [Verse 2]

    Autumn enters the land
    Time flows like sand
    Memories of yesterday
    Like sunshine on may

    [Bridge]

    [Chorus]




    Submitted on 2007-08-05 14:44:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I know little about music. so that said I think you have a very good written work here. I saw only a few things:
    this seems a little forced

    Free of war and tears
    us winning our timeless fears

    I did not understand this part:
    The the grieffull

    I hope other that know more about music can be more helpful
    dana



    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by raptures | [ Reply to This ]


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