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    dots Submission Name: Throw Awaydots

    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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       Need suggestions for this slow rolling "ballad". The music type is somewhat metal, but with bright guitars and high pitch bass line.

    Thank you in advance.

    ( Fixed "The the griefful tears" -> "All the grieffull tears" )

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThrow Awaydots


    Throw away
    Cold 'n' fear
    I'm holdin' ye me dear
    The new era is near


    There is no need to feel ashamed
    The new dawn of man has arrived

    [Verse 1]

    After the storm is gone
    Lead us to the new home
    Free of war and tears
    Us winning our timeless fears


    Throw away
    Throw away
    All the griefful tears
    Throw away all your fears
    Whispering to your ears

    [Verse 2]

    Autumn enters the land
    Time flows like sand
    Memories of yesterday
    Like sunshine on may



    Submitted on 2007-08-05 14:44:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know little about music. so that said I think you have a very good written work here. I saw only a few things:
    this seems a little forced

    Free of war and tears
    us winning our timeless fears

    I did not understand this part:
    The the grieffull

    I hope other that know more about music can be more helpful

    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by raptures | [ Reply to This ]

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