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    dots Submission Name: Happy Face Pleasedots

    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 364
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 545
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    dotsHappy Face Pleasedots

    Quell that tongue,
    those writhing lips--
    you've gone and dripped black syllables
    all over the freshly-waxed floor.

                         I won't. I won't I won't I won't
                         I'm gonna scream, spew noise
                         let it etch into the walls
                         and echo around the goddamn ceiling.
                         No mountaintops for me,
                         they can't hold this rage.
                         Bottle it up, let it fester
                         let it thunder let it seethe
                         condense and rain boiling fury
                         hot enough to melt this worthless world.

    This is not how an adult behaves.
    Be calm, collected,
    content in serenity.
    Relax, and please use your

                         No, no more inside voices.
                         No more hiding, speaking pretty.
                         I'm sick of you and your decibel limits
                         your political correctness
                         your insufferable polite pretension--
                         I am done playing nice.

    Happy face please.
    Turn that frown upsidedown
    or it'll stick that way,
    and then you'll scare the children.

                         What the hell is so wrong
                         about being angry?

    Submitted on 2007-08-05 16:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your emotions were raging, i felt strongly about every passage, great writing, I can feel and visualize your meanings, Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-12 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Felt the anger. The emotion was all there. Very interesting how you divided the voice of anger and the one that was trying to calm you down.

    Some punctuation at like:
    " at let it thunder[,] let it seethe "

    Great read :)!
    | Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]

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