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    dots Submission Name: Cold-hearted truthdots

    Author: Depdem
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 92/88/44
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCold-hearted truthdots

    Truth be told
    The odds are against me,
    Truth be heard
    I've nowhere to turn.

    You can listen... carefully,
    You can try and comprehend,
    But I've been deprived of empathy,
    And now, I really can't care.

    Emotions flow with vehement intensity,
    Above the prominent cliffs of stupidity,
    Below the enticement of love,
    But most importantly, tucked for eternity

    You may wonder or believe,
    Or even try and understand,
    But listen, judge me not,
    I thrive and I've tried, but this I must.

    Take my word and believe it true,
    Yes, you...
    The haunting being of non-existance
    Attempt no further to see me through.

    Backed in a corner, far from me,
    There lies my head, my hands and my feet,
    Clinging to everything, waiting for time,
    Hoping... eager to wake from this lie

    But everything ends...
    Even hopes and dreams,
    It'll all be insignificant
    Like myself and me.

    Submitted on 2007-08-05 17:14:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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