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    dots Submission Name: Sanctuarydots

    Author: Nynaeve
    ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43/67/28
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 868
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       Inspiration struck all of a sudden and this poem came out. I was mainly thinking on how some people refuse to see what's right in front of them and finally see it, when it's too late.


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    I shield my eyes
    From the truths that hurt
    From the lies that burn deep
    Hiding, while my soul quivers.

    I trun my back
    On everything and everyone
    Both right and wrong
    Both consumed by my wrath.

    I've blinded myself
    Robbed of scent and sight
    Yet Granting myself one gift
    Ignorance to what's to come.

    So when the storm draws near
    I'll remain unaware.
    When thunder rawrs and sneers
    I'll smile without a care.
    And while the lightening strikes
    And the earth shakes in fear
    I'll know without a doubt
    That the end is near.

    Submitted on 2007-08-05 17:30:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a candid and straightforward write. It flowed from one point to the next in a steady progression of emotions and images. The piece matched the title as well, which is an added treat.

    The Gadfly
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I don't really believe in sticking to some unwritten 'rules' to write poetry. Free verse is exactly what it is....free verse. And while I was writing it....it just seemed right to continue the last stanza a bit more instead of staying at the same 4 lines routine.

    Thanks for your comment and it's nice to meet you too ;)

    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Nynaeve | [ Reply to This ]
      Merry Meet Nynaeve. I liked your poem. I was just wondering why the last stanza was so much longer than the others. But all in all I liked it very much. Blessed Be Andie
    | Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]

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