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    dots Submission Name: The White and Red Castledots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 386
    Class/Type: Story/Legend
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       This is what happens when I'm not allowed to eat for several days.

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    dotsThe White and Red Castledots

    My car dragging across the rugged asphalt
    Running on empty, getting ready to die
    And why does it have to be so damn hot?
    In the distance...no...seriously?....
    A bright, red and white castle is flashing on the horizon
    It could be my imagination but....
    A sound from the engine startles me
    Wait...not the engine, my stomach
    Okay, so I need some food....fast
    So I drive up to the castle and gaze in awe
    The sun's rays bouncing and racing across it

    I walk in and bells chime at my arrival
    Soft music drifts towards me and pulls me in
    I scan the room and decide to sit down
    Walking across a checkerboard floor
    My nose is stung with smells of food and...
    Suddenly, out of nowhere
    The Queen floats over by me and says she'll give me three wishes
    I think long and hard, my eyes scanning over tiny black words written on the table in front of me

    There's gotta be a catch to this...
    Can it really be that simple?
    And where the hell's the dragon?
    A loud roar erupts from somewhere in back of the castle
    My question is answered and I rest my case
    Flames billow up from behind the long shiny table to my right
    I decide to avoid that particular area

    The Queen, in her white and red gown and black crown, asks me once more what I desire most
    Nervously, but surely, I tell her
    She smiles and then disappears from my view
    I take the time to analyze my surroundings
    Who knows when I shall return to this place?
    The walls are decorated with a large mural of people
    Perhaps the other royals? Possibly depicting the story of battles long passed?
    The windows, sparkling with the setting sun's rays

    The Queen returns and places a small, box into my hands
    She smiles and tells me to carry on with my day, safely
    I nod to her, say the same, and then reach for the exit

    Once outside, I take a deep breath of fresh air
    Blinking out the sun and baking in the damn heat, I return to my piece of shit car with the dents and flaws
    And slowly drive away

    From the local Dairy Queen

    Submitted on 2007-08-05 22:52:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa. that's kinda weird. but cool. I had a good laugh at the end. But has anyone ever told you you should seek mental help? No? Well, good, because that would mean I need it, too. My purple monkeys think I do, but they've been known to lie to me.
    Okay, back to the story. As I said, funny. the style was...odd, but it got my attention. It shows what imagination can turn something ordinary into. Very cool. Keep crazy.
    Lizzy B

    PS - where's your picture from? It's very cool!
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay. Ususally I don't read stories, only poetry. But this one pulled me right in and took me for a wild ride to the dairy queen. So I must say you did an excellent job. Where did you come up with the idea for this?
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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