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    dots Submission Name: The White and Red Castledots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 386
    Class/Type: Story/Legend
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    Description:
       This is what happens when I'm not allowed to eat for several days.


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    dotsThe White and Red Castledots
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    My car dragging across the rugged asphalt
    Running on empty, getting ready to die
    And why does it have to be so damn hot?
    In the distance...no...seriously?....
    A bright, red and white castle is flashing on the horizon
    It could be my imagination but....
    A sound from the engine startles me
    Wait...not the engine, my stomach
    Okay, so I need some food....fast
    So I drive up to the castle and gaze in awe
    The sun's rays bouncing and racing across it

    I walk in and bells chime at my arrival
    Soft music drifts towards me and pulls me in
    I scan the room and decide to sit down
    Walking across a checkerboard floor
    My nose is stung with smells of food and...
    Windex?
    Suddenly, out of nowhere
    The Queen floats over by me and says she'll give me three wishes
    I think long and hard, my eyes scanning over tiny black words written on the table in front of me

    There's gotta be a catch to this...
    Can it really be that simple?
    And where the hell's the dragon?
    A loud roar erupts from somewhere in back of the castle
    My question is answered and I rest my case
    Flames billow up from behind the long shiny table to my right
    I decide to avoid that particular area

    The Queen, in her white and red gown and black crown, asks me once more what I desire most
    Nervously, but surely, I tell her
    She smiles and then disappears from my view
    I take the time to analyze my surroundings
    Who knows when I shall return to this place?
    The walls are decorated with a large mural of people
    Perhaps the other royals? Possibly depicting the story of battles long passed?
    The windows, sparkling with the setting sun's rays

    The Queen returns and places a small, box into my hands
    She smiles and tells me to carry on with my day, safely
    I nod to her, say the same, and then reach for the exit

    Once outside, I take a deep breath of fresh air
    Blinking out the sun and baking in the damn heat, I return to my piece of shit car with the dents and flaws
    And slowly drive away


    From the local Dairy Queen




    Submitted on 2007-08-05 22:52:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa. that's kinda weird. but cool. I had a good laugh at the end. But has anyone ever told you you should seek mental help? No? Well, good, because that would mean I need it, too. My purple monkeys think I do, but they've been known to lie to me.
    Okay, back to the story. As I said, funny. the style was...odd, but it got my attention. It shows what imagination can turn something ordinary into. Very cool. Keep crazy.
    Byeyahs,
    Lizzy B

    PS - where's your picture from? It's very cool!
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay. Ususally I don't read stories, only poetry. But this one pulled me right in and took me for a wild ride to the dairy queen. So I must say you did an excellent job. Where did you come up with the idea for this?
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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