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    dots Submission Name: With You At Lastdots
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    Author: TheBlackFairy
    ASL Info:    18/female/Caldwell
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/29/15
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWith You At Lastdots
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    What is this thing that haunts me deep
    Inside my soul?
    Tearing my heart so slowly apart that all
    Hope has lost control.

    Yet still I stand
    On your front door,
    Undeniably confused.

    A mystery that slowly
    Takes my hand with a

    Lovers grace
    As we lose our
    Selves among
    The stary sky.




    Submitted on 2007-08-05 23:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Feels like something I would write. Especially the second verse. I can relate to it a lot. I feel that way when I'm talking to my ex. Confused on whether or not I want to enter that relatonship or not. Good write. Very emotional.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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