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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1463



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       I didnt think it was possible to be so strong and be over someone but then just talking to them or seeing them smile you fall back in love so hard and fast it was like nothing had changed


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    what have i become
    i hate what i see
    its not the outside appearance
    but what has become of me
    sweet, innocent and foolish
    i thought the world of you
    but i was just a game in your eyes
    i really didnt mean that much
    love is just a simple word
    but it can also break your heart
    you will not see me cry
    you dont deserve that right
    you gave up you broke me
    and then moved on with your life
    its not that simple for me
    for you see you were my world
    you put the shine back in the eyes
    of a broken minded girl
    you gave me back my life
    promised things i thought were true
    now 7 months later
    nothing matters more then you
    ive tried to move on
    forget that you were even there
    but each night im alone
    sitting in my room
    surrounded by the memories
    the ring beside my bed
    engraved with eternal love
    the rose above my window
    you gave to me with a hug
    the teddy bears that sit on my bed
    my only comfort at night
    everything in my room
    reminds me of my life
    the life i had with you
    was always to good to be true
    never was it possible
    to be as happy as i was with you
    surrounded by these memories
    and the moments i wont forget
    i chose to give my love to you
    and that i do not regret




    Submitted on 2007-08-06 04:39:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is , differnet from what i've been readin all day so i like it.It's confusingly straght-foward , if thats right , like i don't get it , but i really do feel for it.The ending is a nice rap up , ends on a brighter note , somewhat , but overall is nice,long to me but is good.I feel for ya , alot and if this is recent , hope ya get through it , go d luck says me , and lovely piece btw
    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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