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The Birth


Author: Katana Ryoko
ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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The Birth


A line came to mind
So I wrote it down
And another followed
And another and another

I found it was a verse
Filled with emotions
That I was strongly feeling
It was my release

I read the words
Over and over again
Til I knew the next verses
And finished with the last line

Starting at the beginning
I slowly read it again
Correcting here and there
In the end, a poem was born




Submitted on 2007-08-06 11:16:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  if there were a handbook for writing poetry this would be it,just one page bound in leather and padlocked shut.
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| Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]
  True, and I loved this one. Such simplicity and yet such a cute verse..it almost flows like something out of a child's book.

Good work at this :)

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| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
  And so it is with us poets and writers! Your verse is beautiful in it's simplicity, and tells a story that all of us who write know by heart! Bravo!
| Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Wonderful.. I really love the simplicity in your words. Everything just flows very smoothly.
Love and Peace,
lynn
| Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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