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    dots Submission Name: The Birthdots

    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsThe Birthdots

    A line came to mind
    So I wrote it down
    And another followed
    And another and another

    I found it was a verse
    Filled with emotions
    That I was strongly feeling
    It was my release

    I read the words
    Over and over again
    Til I knew the next verses
    And finished with the last line

    Starting at the beginning
    I slowly read it again
    Correcting here and there
    In the end, a poem was born

    Submitted on 2007-08-06 11:16:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if there were a handbook for writing poetry this would be it,just one page bound in leather and padlocked shut.
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]
      True, and I loved this one. Such simplicity and yet such a cute verse..it almost flows like something out of a child's book.

    Good work at this :)

    - v
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      And so it is with us poets and writers! Your verse is beautiful in it's simplicity, and tells a story that all of us who write know by heart! Bravo!
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful.. I really love the simplicity in your words. Everything just flows very smoothly.
    Love and Peace,
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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