"A Dark and Lonely Road" by Ron Cole

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Author:	Ron Cole
Elite Ratio:	3.89 - 1971/1344/205
Words:	119

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
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Average Vote:	4.5000
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"A Dark and Lonely Road" dots

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There's a road that's dark and lonely,
that actually goes nowhere.
The road is dark and lonely,
because you are not here.

I travel down this lonely road
trying to find my way,
back to the land of sunshine,
back to a better day!

If only you would realize
how dark the days become!
Without your lovely presence,
dark clouds block the Sun!

And without the Sun, the flowers
wilt and fade away;
the world becomes a dreary place,
with no color in the day!

Till you return, I guess I'll learn
to bear a heavier load,
and how to somehow find a way,
to walk this lonely road.

Ron Cole
July 2007

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  Two words. Amazing. Favorite.
| Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by Megsrus aka Meg | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this so much! I did find it awkward how the second and fourth line of the first stanza don't really rhyme, but they did in all the others. Other than that, I can totally identify! Good job!

[Kristina]
| Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by Hungarian Girl | [ Reply to This ]
  wow hun, i agree with frank, this is very heartfelt. its screams of emptiness...lonliness. a sad poem...but hopeful...i really like this!
i have missed ur work, hun. ill be back later to read your other recent posts.
much love ;)
| Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  ~*~

I find that it must have been difficult to somehow muster
so much optimism and hope into a poem that is actually sad. Nice descriptions and some wonderfully done images. I liked this stanza most:

"And without the Sun, the flowers
wilt and fade away;
the world becomes a dreary place,
with no color in the day!"

~*~

P
| Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah my heart just sunk down in my stomach
i felt like i wasnt gunna be happy ever again

i know totally dramatic but true

i felt so sad and depressed
i mean i would if i didnt have the one i cared about with me anymore so thats completely understandable

it truly is heartfelt

great write

<3
truthbetold
| Posted on 2007-08-25 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a good heartfelt poem. This is a feeling I think we all know, at some point in life or another, and hopefully not too often cause it is not a good feeling. Unfortunately, we often dont realise what we have until it is not there anymore and then once we do realise it, they are gone. All we can do is hopefully learn from our mistakes and appreciate the ones in our life every single day. And more importantly, to let them know how much we appreciate them. Sorry I have been away so long, work work work ya know!! Nice write.

Lorna
| Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  I find I always enjoy your words, to me they are one of the few things that remind me as a poet that emotion can be put into words in much more ways than the one I choose to employ.
I might say this is much, much deeper than just round-the-dot longing poetry, it simply speaks for a companion to encourage one onwards on the 'road of life'. Which is a powerful thing, so choice of theme came in and yet again the reader is not disappointed.
But technicalities are not the point of the poem, in fact it is the raw feeling embedded into every word, speaking volumes and echoing for a long period of time.

look on the bright side of life, Ron.

Cheers always
Azuire
| Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem reminds me of me and my recent feelings. Feelings that I have since come to terms with but was hard to do. As the reader I can feel the pain and the agony ofthe yearning. So I guess I am saying I felt this poem. So far I am liking you writes.

~~Donna~~
| Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
  I could feel your pain of missing her with each and every line of this poem. Emotional pain came be unbearabel for there is no aspirin or Advil to take to lessen its ferocity. I am never disappointed by my occasional visits to your page Ron and for that i offer my sincere thanks.
| Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, this very deftly done, indeed! This would make a great lyric, quite excellent all around... bravo... bravo ... bravo ... loved it!
| Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
   This is so beautiful and full of emotion Ron, and yea - you were right when you said you thought id relate, this is how it is when he's stuck in the army and i can't even contact him. You work is amazing as always.

love n luck
~lou~
| Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  Wonderful! This is a sad but very well drawn picture of 'a dark and lonely road'... all suffused with pain and longing. The art lies in bringing forward a clear emotional effect through a minimalist imagery. You have made optimum use of your metaphor... and yet it is so simple.

Excellent... no doubt :)
| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
   I felt the longing you have through your words...

Its true what you say when someone we long to be with isn't around our hearts weigh heavy and we can't seem to find any light shining through the clouds....All i can say is i hope one day this person does walk along side you and when that day happens you will walk with a happy heart.....I see nothing here that didn't make sense infact it made perfect sense...You have a way of painting an image so well i can't see anyone not understanding the meaning here....great job in puting your feelins out in this piece.....
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
  Postive with a sense of sadness. You don't want to walk the road alone, but if you have to you'll find a way. I like that.
Katana
| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  What a deeply touching poem! This one seems like the right match for a "Missing You" greeting card. I cannot imagine a person who would not feel loved after reading your caring words. :-) Sharon
| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  indeed, very romantic. specially, the last verse. the poem is simple, yet filled with such strong emotions. i particularly like poems with nature in it, so this was my style and understanding of writing.

:) v
| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
  Very heartfelt Ron, and up to your usual excellent standard. Longing poems always tug at the heartstrings.

Very well done.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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