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    dots Submission Name: Ship Of Broken Dreamsdots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots Ship Of Broken Dreamsdots

    I watched the ghost wind sway the grass,
    And rake the waves with unseen tines,
    Blow spoors from nodding dandelions,
    Across a rippled lake of glass.

    That lake is like a mirror set
    Within some Sirenís castle keep
    And all who gaze therein must sleep
    The awful sleep of sad regret.

    And now that ghost wind fills the sail
    Of my poor ship of broken dreams
    Till all this world to my heart seems
    So like the coldest Winter gale.

    Submitted on 2007-08-06 15:36:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i particularly liked the last verse. Though, i got a little confused about the soul of the poem..but after reading the last verse, everything just made sense.

    keep writing

    - v
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

    Poured with mystique and silk. I always admired your grasp of the English language, you seem to combine the most alluring words into a spectacular puzzle image. Intriguing, no doubt. Once again you show how much you like to use the motif of the sea and how your rhyming formation works like a charm.


    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Ron. This is one of the best poems I've read. You'll be finding this on my favorites list.
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Megsrus aka Meg | [ Reply to This ]
      Golly, for such a short poem, this bit of verse tells a mighty tale! Aaaah, that "Ship of Broken Dreams", the tattered vessel that I often sail, and on a voyage that leads to nowhere! Penned with the eloquence and vision of the master himself! To use your most apt phrase "Bravo, Bravo, Bravo"!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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