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    dots Submission Name: If Iím With Youdots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 762
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    dotsIf Iím With Youdots
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    Verse 1

    I see you
    It turns me inside out
    Everything stops
    Its only you I see
    Cuz I
    Going to break these walls down
    If youíre not with me
    If youíre not with meÖ

    [Chorus]

    If Iím with you
    Thereís nothing more we have to do
    So hereís my hand
    We can be together
    Underneath the stars are shining
    If Iím with you

    Verse 2

    I am fooled
    By my own mind
    As I twist the truth
    For my own desire
    But you
    Really turn me on right
    But I am off
    Cuz youíre not with me

    [Chorus]

    [Bridge]

    But you
    Are coming out your shell
    And Iím
    Will be more than well

    Iím what you need
    Iím what you need
    To be

    Oh open your eyes
    Wake up tonight
    Come to meÖ
    Come to me

    [Instrumentals]

    [Chorus]





    Submitted on 2007-08-07 02:30:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      tell you something there is something we call rhyme in music find it out and try to use it it will make you work better love
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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