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    dots Submission Name: Never Gonna Leave me Lonelydots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 860
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1119



    Description:
       Praying and hoping he stays


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    dotsNever Gonna Leave me Lonelydots
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    Verse 1

    In the corner
    Of your bedroom
    I saw a letter packed in with clothes
    It was written
    Pretty lately
    Saying I hope you come back home
    I was waiting
    For the day when
    Youíll say you have to go
    I canít believe I act like I donít know

    Chorus

    I remember when you said
    You never gonna leave me lonely
    And I remember when
    The day you just walked away
    My heart is here breaking
    Donít wanna close my eyes
    Cuz everytime I do
    I realize I see your face inside
    Its only walls and me tonight

    Verse 2

    Well I canít help
    My feelings
    For you it remains the same
    They stay closely
    And hoping
    One day youíll come again
    I could call you
    You wonít answer
    The phone rings the day away
    I tell myself thereís nothing wrong
    And weíre okay

    [Chorus]

    [Instrumentals]

    [Repeat Chorus]

    [Instrumentals until fade]




    Submitted on 2007-08-07 03:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this work sounds like the work of arock band are you a rock artist ? like i said in the other of your work just give it a seqence that where the stuff starts till where it ends okay its good keep it up
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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