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    dots Submission Name: It Will Only Hurt Moredots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 703
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    dotsIt Will Only Hurt Moredots
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    Verse 1

    He’s so confused
    He never saw this coming
    He has to choose
    One life will make him live concealing
    Everything
    And everything he has is worth losing
    It won’t go away
    It will stay with him the same
    It will never go away…

    Chorus

    He wants to move on with his life
    But everytime that he tries something else just arise
    He wants to be happy sometimes
    I could see that he’s hurting when I look in his eyes
    He wants to give up
    He still asks God why
    But it will only hurt more if he tries

    Verse 2

    He’s the sweetest thing
    I guess he doesn’t know this yet
    He has a lot to give
    But all he can do is get upset
    He wonders why
    Why around me he’s always feeling shy
    Don’t wanna pursue
    Cuz he knows what he would do

    [Chorus]

    It will only hurt more if he tries
    It will hurt more….
    It will hurt more….
    Hurt more

    [Andante]

    He wants to move on with his life
    But everytime that he tries something else just arise
    He wants to be happy sometimes
    He wants to just wake up and stare straight in my eyes
    He wants to give in
    He still asks God why
    But it would only hurt more if he tries





    Submitted on 2007-08-07 03:26:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your form and structure is excellent once again. I can't find any fault with this piece at all.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm certainly not an expert on lyrics, but these sound good to me! That's plenty of emotion and pain just sitting between the lines. Nice work, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      hi its cool i think its a nice work especially how you used words with good imagery but i think you should have shown us a bit of the problem so that we get to understand it the more which will ehance enjoyment and finally appreciation of this work of arts on the whole it was good
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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