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    dots Submission Name: Knot Of Emotionsdots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsKnot Of Emotionsdots
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    So many emotions
    Poured into one soul
    Many of them conflicting
    Contradicting each other

    Trying to hold on
    To my sanity
    Slowly slipping away
    Out of my grasp

    My breath catches
    My heart skips a beat
    I never would've thought
    Feelings could be the death of me

    Stressed out from this
    Knot of emotions
    My mind is working through
    Putting a name to each one

    Sorting the strands
    Until all have been sorted
    Then and only then
    Can I feel one... happiness




    Submitted on 2007-08-07 09:01:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Another excellent piece, Katana! Our emotions give color and dimension to the world, even if they make life a little more hectic at times! Well structured, and well written!
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Today must be 'good poetry day' on elite. Another beautiful piece, and this one is like many other poems of yours is simple and too familiar. We all have been there, haven't we..this land of emotions. many of them repetitive.

    Keep writing..i would be keen to read more of your work.

    - v
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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