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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Way To Fall Asleepdots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsThe Perfect Way To Fall Asleepdots
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    Arms wrapped tightly with love
    Around my small, slender body
    Naked flesh to naked flesh
    Skin as soft as the finest silk
    Perfectly flawless like porcelain
    Heartbeat pounding steadily
    Neither of us makes a move
    Content to just lie there in bed
    Legs entangled, fingers caressing
    Eyes flutter, struggling to keep awake
    With "I love you"s and whispered nothings
    We finally give in to the exhaustion
    And fall asleep in our lovers' embrace




    Submitted on 2007-08-07 11:25:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this poem!! yep i think thats a perfect way to fall asleep!!
    ~akaila~
    good job!
    | Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the emotion.
    It is the perfect way to fall asleep...

    <33

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a great submission. Reading it, I can almost feel HER arms around me, the one I love, that is.
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      Marvelous! What a perfect way to fall asleep! Another good one from your pen!
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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