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The Perfect Way To Fall Asleep

Author: Katana Ryoko
ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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The Perfect Way To Fall Asleep

Arms wrapped tightly with love
Around my small, slender body
Naked flesh to naked flesh
Skin as soft as the finest silk
Perfectly flawless like porcelain
Heartbeat pounding steadily
Neither of us makes a move
Content to just lie there in bed
Legs entangled, fingers caressing
Eyes flutter, struggling to keep awake
With "I love you"s and whispered nothings
We finally give in to the exhaustion
And fall asleep in our lovers' embrace

Submitted on 2007-08-07 11:25:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love this poem!! yep i think thats a perfect way to fall asleep!!
good job!
| Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the emotion.
It is the perfect way to fall asleep...


| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is a great submission. Reading it, I can almost feel HER arms around me, the one I love, that is.
| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
  Marvelous! What a perfect way to fall asleep! Another good one from your pen!
| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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