The Perfect Way To Fall Asleep

Author: Katana Ryoko ASL Info:    17/F/Cali Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109 Words: 74

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The Perfect Way To Fall Asleep

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Arms wrapped tightly with love Around my small, slender body Naked flesh to naked flesh Skin as soft as the finest silk Perfectly flawless like porcelain Heartbeat pounding steadily Neither of us makes a move Content to just lie there in bed Legs entangled, fingers caressing Eyes flutter, struggling to keep awake With "I love you"s and whispered nothings We finally give in to the exhaustion And fall asleep in our lovers' embrace

Submitted on 2007-08-07 11:25:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i love this poem!! yep i think thats a perfect way to fall asleep!! ~akaila~ good job!

| Posted on 2007-09-03 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

I love the emotion. It is the perfect way to fall asleep... <33 }i{Renae}i{

| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]

I think this is a great submission. Reading it, I can almost feel HER arms around me, the one I love, that is.

| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]

Marvelous! What a perfect way to fall asleep! Another good one from your pen!

| Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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