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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       its amazing how one moment you feel as if you have all and complete control in this life you live, then the very next moment your completely helpless... :-/


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    I didn't realize how quickly we can loose control
    I did not acknowledge how in control I was...

    Before I lost it.

    We all go threw our daily routine
    Doing what we all do
    Day in and day out

    But its not until something has changed
    Or Something is gone
    Until we give it, its full appreciation

    We're all guilty of this dirty deed
    We all do not uphold what we should
    And appreciation the real value of it.

    Its not until we loose do we go making outrageous promises

    And although things are bad...
    They could be worse

    And although I may have it bad
    There's always someone out there who has it worse
    We feel we need pity, but what we really need is...

    -Tough Love
    -A Motivating Friend
    -Someone to hold us high when we fall

    But we also need to acknowledge those and those items in our daily lives.
    That make things all the easier.

    Because...My friend, when it is gone
    When we have used up all the outrageous promises
    When they no longer work
    And God speaks we will have to accept our Losses
    And hold onto our Wins




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      so true. it is amazing how we think we have control and then the next thing we know we are helpless. that happened to me. i can totally relate to this piece word for word. i absolutly love this. so far i have gotten alot out of your work. i really encourage you to keep writing. i know i already told you but your work is awesome. not very many people can write with such emotion...fabulous work!!
    joez**
    | Posted on 2009-06-07 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry I couldn't comment sooner, been on holiday. It's very good, really wise about what we really have, and shouldn't really abuse it. Good write. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-08-14 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Jackz, this so well explained, oh the things we all take for granted huh?
    I guess the feeling you express should ultimately teach us to cherish everything we have and every moment we spend with our loved ones.

    Nice work my friend
    I think I will like to favor!!!
    ~Matt
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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