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    dots Submission Name: Prepared To Take A Journeydots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This Isnt Finished But Thoughts Would Be Good


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    dotsPrepared To Take A Journeydots
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    are you prepared to take a journey
    through the eyes of a girl
    living a life of heart break and pain
    with each new day comes a new lie
    a new disguise
    hiding from the world is this innocent girl scared to be herself.
    are you ready to understand the pain she must indure on a daily basis
    the constant torture of her mind with her fate sealed at the age eighteen
    no longer does she fight
    the game is over she has been defeated
    by the strongest thing of all love
    so tell me are you prepared to take the time to undestand the pain that can bee seen in my eyes




    Submitted on 2007-08-07 23:02:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, simple and expresses what i myself have been through.

    i think it seems finished to me because the journey that you are taking is not finished, you will find love, you will be happy. there was a time in my life when i tried to give it all up, i tried to end the pain i had caused, i tried to stop the pain i felt, i was lucky..... i survived and then i found what i had been looking for, the love i wanted, craved and felt i deserved came in the most unlikely package, in the form of my boyfriend who is nothing like what i normally go for in guys.

    Trust your own instincts, they wont lead you astray, im going to add this to my favourites, and if you don't mind i'd like to put you on my stalker list.

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    | Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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