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    dots Submission Name: out of airdots
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    Author: morbid_misery
    ASL Info:    17/f/ontcanada
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 40/61/33
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    I wanna scream at the top of my lungs
    Iím tired of feeling that Iíve done wrong
    Why do I like you?
    Why do I care?
    Put me out of my misery
    Iím running out of air

    Iím drowning within myself
    Struggling to be enough
    Why do I feel the need?
    Why do I try?
    Hold my head down, let me drown
    Iím running out of air




    Submitted on 2007-08-08 00:17:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm, I can relate. Even in something as short as that, I could feel the emotion. I can realize the purpose. You made it clear, and that is a good thing. More power to you.

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    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]
      Simply perfect, its short and sweet to the point and that's what i love. the ending flowed so sweetly off my tongue its sounded like a song good work.

    keep writing,
    Zeroblue
    | Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by Themissingshado | [ Reply to This ]


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