A Brave Face

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 113

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A Brave Face

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A brave face Says a lot in this place And deep down inside She needs someone to hold onto But her walls are too high For anyone to climb And at night she lies awake in bed And she prays and prays in her head For someone to come save her from the pain Just for someone to make it all right again But now she’s dying with the pain inside of her Cause she knows it’s easier to die Than it is to stay alive The clock ticks backwards As the blood drips from the knife Staring at the stars she knows It’s time to say goodbye

Submitted on 2007-08-08 01:58:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hmm, I can relate to this. From my interpretation, the person in this poem is suffering from depression, and is to proud to have some one help her, or possibly doesn't have anyone at all. The whole thing was very clear and clean cut, which is good. I think the most intreaging line in the whole thing was, The clock ticks backwards, Just the thought poetically is aestheticelly pleasing. I would like to have know a little bit more why she was so depressed though, that way it would tell more of a story, but over all I really liked it :)

| Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]

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