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A Brave Face

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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A Brave Face

A brave face
Says a lot in this place
And deep down inside
She needs someone to hold onto
But her walls are too high
For anyone to climb

And at night she lies awake in bed
And she prays and prays in her head
For someone to come save her from the pain
Just for someone to make it all right again

But now she’s dying with the pain inside of her
Cause she knows it’s easier to die
Than it is to stay alive
The clock ticks backwards
As the blood drips from the knife
Staring at the stars she knows
It’s time to say goodbye

Submitted on 2007-08-08 01:58:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmm, I can relate to this. From my interpretation, the person in this poem is suffering from depression, and is to proud to have some one help her, or possibly doesn't have anyone at all. The whole thing was very clear and clean cut, which is good. I think the most intreaging line in the whole thing was, The clock ticks backwards, Just the thought poetically is aestheticelly pleasing. I would like to have know a little bit more why she was so depressed though, that way it would tell more of a story, but over all I really liked it :)
| Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]

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