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Her Pretty Little Sad Smile

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Her Pretty Little Sad Smile

The cuts on her wrist
Say where she’s been
The battles she’s lost
And the sights she’s seen

She’s the prettiest girl
With dark brown eyes
But she hides her sad story
Behind thousands of lies

Her pretty little sad smile
Shows what happiness
And what energy is left.
She’s in despair, but smiles nonetheless

And she sits on my swing
In the rain every now and again
And when I see her smile
I see all her pain

I knew her once,
I wish I still could
Her life she ended
Before something else would

Submitted on 2007-08-08 01:59:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  That is a powerfull piece.
It's a touchy subject so I won't dig into it.

"I knew her once,
I wish I still could
Her life she ended
Before something else would"

This stanza is hard to read, not literally but the meaning behind it. It's enough to hurt your heart.
I hope she found peace....I'm sorry for your loss.
| Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]

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