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    dots Submission Name: little satisfactiondots
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    Author: Halston
    ASL Info:    20/female/carlsbad,ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 72/71/30
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 933
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       Written when I was 14


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    dotslittle satisfactiondots
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    Little love, little satisfaction
    night can't end untill I
    reach my fucking peak.

    Kisses on the cheek
    I feel my weary heart
    beating, beating, screaming.

    There's nothing more I want
    than a love
    free of vague feelings.

    We plan to drink and get
    So close to death,
    That we might...
    really live tonight.









    Submitted on 2007-08-08 23:10:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I found this write to be very sad
    In this write I believe you are referring to 2 Loving peoplewho cant seem to find their place in this World but deep down they are happy they at least have each other
    Very well written
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, so color me dirty but sex springs to mind yes? If indeed, which i believe you are, talking about sex then yes I have had a few nights like this and congrats on capturing it words, very well done, short sweet and too the point.


    ~~~Raven~~
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]


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