i don't know what else to say
i don't think their IS anything else to say
I think it was written well, a fine exapmle of free verse. It sounded a tad repetitive however. Not from the one stanza being repeated, but how you seemed to say the same exact thing just with different words in the diversified stanza's. I thought with the multiplication of the one your point would be achieved and you could have elboraited more through the other stanza's. Perhaps about why your life is the way it is?