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Ironic Comfort

Author: forfila
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Ironic Comfort

Pity given is miss placed,
And your telling a story someone else re-shaped,
I could play your game; just to bring you shame,
If I didn't need to stay,
I could leave and state; you will soon pay mother nature with every bit of effort you ever gave.
The little devil embedded in flesh that just takes and takes,

You still just think about yourself,
If you can afford to be an optimist because of your wealth,
You should know how it evolved,
The evils of old,
Times when raw intentions saw many souls predestined to be sold,

The world was meant to be one,
But never won, what the hell is a gun?
What is killing a son, spilling blood over nothing that Time wont erase.

I'm a deep believer that there are those among us giving us gifts that inspire us to lift,
But not just for the moment,
Our hearts are opened,
A passage is being shown; giving us the "know"
we are not alone.

But in this place of an ironic comfort,
Our pride suffers,
The facing of the shadows purified in their darkness,
The sorry past,
The questions we ask from the depth of our hearts; but the only answers heard really mean nothing.

Entrust in your heart that our love will lead to a true grail,
Just get over the notion man is on a good trail,
Take my advice life is not for sale, its a gift.

And know we don't get intimidated by tall tales.

Submitted on 2007-08-09 09:38:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice work! and quite a hitting observation about the optimism of the wealthy.... yes, there is a subtle difference between the hope of the real hard-worker and someone who just inherited or appropriated the big ownership rights. The former draws his hope from his faith in himself... a hope that is based on hard reality... while the latter may have that spoon-fed kind of hope that comes from motivational books... an artifice that crumbles when it faces the real heat of hardship.

Otherwise, i think that virtues and vices are not the monopolies of any particular class... it depends on the attitude... whether a person likes to be an asset or a liability.

And you say, life is not for sale, it is a gift-- Nothing can be truer than this.

Forfila, you really write some great things, very thought provoking.

| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this one. Your description and choice of words were really good...and I really liked how u said that life is not for sale, its a gift for truly it is. Yet I think some take it for granted... and them some take it away.. but I guess what right do they have to take it away for just as easily their life could be taken away. ~Of course they wouldn't want that to happen... how sad.
| Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]

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