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    dots Submission Name: My Name is Suicidedots
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    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsMy Name is Suicidedots
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    A falling rain,
    my backdrop.
    A seering pain,
    my pulse.
    A body slain,
    my lifeforce.
    Driven insane,
    my game.

    My name is suicide
    I deal your anguish and your death,
    I grab a hold of your heart
    And slowly leak your breath.

    My name is self-destruction
    I take you to another life,
    Meet me anyway you choose
    Downing, hanging, gun or knife.

    Some people say I'm unholy
    I go against God and fate
    But as a friend, I say choose
    Despair or release, you debate.




    Submitted on 2007-08-09 12:11:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I really like this. You can really feel the strenght in the words. Its almost like you personify suicide. Great job! Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      This style has a whole new feel to it, but it draws me in a lot easier then most writings do. I love the way you used the words and how they flow together perfectly. Looove it!
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      Never heard a suicide poem quite like this one, nice job!
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]


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