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    dots Submission Name: Five Geese Afloatingdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 457
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 497



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       A lovely an inspiring afternoon at the river - me, the geese & GOD ~*~

    Happy Day!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

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    dotsFive Geese Afloatingdots
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    Five Geese afloating
    nature's way
    of boating,
    Regal yet
    not gloating,
    Calls honked out
    in quoting,
    Wings spread
    shining summer
    coating...

    Float, Float, Floating
    with all five;
    Calm, in Peace and
    Oh, so joyfully alive!
    And, into the waters
    of Life we dive...
    Calming chaos
    as we strive
    in nature
    as in man -
    Do not wish
    Know you CAN!




    Submitted on 2007-08-09 12:53:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i once caught a goose around the neck. i hand fed it a cheetos puff snack first then snatched it up with the other hand. it was heka funny. but then it started screamin so i let it go and it ran away. dang. oh well. good write anyway.






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    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds like a lovely afternoon!!! You are so inspiring with your poems. They are always so upbeat and ya just have to smile when reading this. I like how you worked in all the rhyming throughout this one, it all fits perfectly. Always a joy to read your poems. I gotta find more time!!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Honk honk. Very vivid with great imagery. Your river sure sounds nice.

    Great stuff from you.

    R. Iverbank.
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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