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    dots Submission Name: Molested from the toes to the head.dots
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    Author: SammySueYou
    ASL Info:    23/f/nm
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90/78/30
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 702
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    Description:
       This was a poem I wrote to help explain to the people I hurt why I hurt them. I was molested by two different men as a child, and I have had a few other sexual assaults against me... Its hard for me to feel sometimes.


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    dotsMolested from the toes to the head.dots
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    This is the brutal story of a girl named "Sammy Sue,"
    it's just the very person that's telling you what's true.
    I try to say some words to ease the pain,
    they hit like shards of glass and drops of acid rain.
    In a tower my prince came to rescue me,
    I was suppose to live my life so happily.
    I am not as whole as I was when I was young,
    before perversion invaded and seered my tongue.
    I am the sexual objection,
    that fuels your erection.
    I am the one that was abused,
    that can easily be used.
    I was never meant to be loved the way that you did,
    it's like someone took my heart and love is what they rid.
    Sometimes when I moan you think I am being pleasured,
    but deep inside it hurts... a pain that can't be measured.
    I cry at night when I think that nobody is looking,
    when I have sex with you it feels like I am hooking.
    I give into your fantasies so I can feel atleast an ounce of being,
    but when it's all said and done its the love I'm not believing.
    Why can't I be normal without feeling so much pain?
    sometimes when I try to be I am driven more insane.
    I am like an animal in captivity that shouldn't be released,
    rabid like a killer dog waiting to be unleashed.
    I have my inner demons that tell me what to do,
    sometimes I can't help it when I hurt everyone....but mostly you.




    Submitted on 2007-08-09 15:25:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good piece. It had a decent rhyme scheme but it didnt sound forced or corny. It sounded real.
    | Posted on 2007-10-11 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Very honest and strong. You've laid a lot of yourself bare with those words.

    I'm not one to talk of structure, because I know nothing about it. Structure, schmucture. The value of a writing is in the power of the words to move, and yours are very moving.

    Dig deep Sammy Sue, you know you've got all you'll ever need.
    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by RR7059 | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all I would like to start by saying that I am so sorry for what has happened to you. I know you've prob. been told that too many times before and it has lost it's meaning, but I truly am sorry. No one should EVER have to go through what you have been through.

    This poem made me feel sad, but mostly angry! I want to arrest the sorry people that did this to you. I want them to pay for what they have done. But I know that it's not my place, nor my battle.

    I know that I am a complete stranger and this prob. wont mean a thing to you, but I am here if you ever want to talk. I understand pain and sorrow. I understand emptiness inside. I just wanted to let you know that I am here for you.

    As far as your poem goes, it was a really great peice. I can tell that your a very talented writer. It was very expressive and real. I could almost feel what you were feeling as you wrote it. Great job expressing yourself. You are one of a kind.
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought that, because this was real to you, you wrote is very powerfully and that makes it a great piece in itself.
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]


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