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    dots Submission Name: Early Morning Raindots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsEarly Morning Raindots

    The breezes stop blowing
    Everything stands still
    But I just want the pinwheels to move once more
    In the distance I can see
    The clouds looming so closely
    And I realize I don't care anyway
    I never did, I suppose
    What's happened to you
    What's happened to me
    It may've seemed like everything
    But it doesn't mean a thing

    Laying in bed, the rain's pounding hard
    The fan's blades moving in slow motion
    Each rotation matching
    The ticks of the clock
    Shadows cast in the corners of the room
    Streams of light melting down the walls
    Pouring rain
    Fading into applause from the crowd
    All those faces, but all are blank
    This was the moment, I'd thought
    We'd all been waiting for
    But it didn't mean a thing to them

    Simple notes, floating to me
    Ripples from the soundwaves
    Swaying us both back and forth
    They may pretend
    That it meant something to them
    But the clouds are moving
    The pinwheels are rotating
    And you
    And only you
    Mean everything to me

    This is our moment
    We'll live it now
    We'll watch the shadows
    As they dance and bend
    Across your face
    This is our moment
    Our only moment
    And our rain keeps falling down

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      The word images and pictures are strong in this, and I find the story and intrigue delightful! Your writing has confidence and eloquence, and you work is well structured! Thank you for sharing this with us!
    | Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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