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    dots Submission Name: Dirty Worksdots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 1083
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 657



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       Oh my fucking god I'm so sick of doing EVERYTHIGN in this god damn house! so I'm ranting about it, feel free to bitch right back.


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    dotsDirty Worksdots
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    I feel like fucking cinderella
    cleaning every day
    I clean up all their stupid shit
    while my brothers off at play
    I do the dishes
    sweep the floors
    like im their fucking butler whore
    i cook them food
    then clean the kitchen
    and if its not perfect
    listen to them bitching
    you stupid fuck
    you messed it up
    well screw you too
    its more than you do!
    the shit is hot
    the shit is heavy
    my mind is tearing
    like fucking confetti
    i've had enough
    i'll do no more
    now wait one second
    whilst i mop the floor




    Submitted on 2007-08-09 20:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I hate to see pieces without a comment - and sometimes yep, you just need to vent and get it off your chest.

    We've all had those days! Well, don't forget Cinderella is the better person - maybe you'll have a pumpkin turn into a carriage or sportscar & you can get the heck out of there!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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