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    dots Submission Name: It Is Only Time... 2dots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsIt Is Only Time... 2dots

    To the child in pain,
    It is only your pain that upsets me,
    So many minds of the young emotionally shut,
    Yet they plainly detect me,
    There is know way to make sense of this total mess,
    days of these lives, innocents sent to be crushed and forsaken,
    The tall order of your special sacrifice is to know and see in clarity the greater wrongs and rights, you have insights in the spirit and mind to always pick the truth from a lie.
    But whats the reason for you to be born rudely and suffer through your innocence?
    I know you sense the importance of collectivness,
    Just dream free child ease up on your senses, know that every demon you arrest your mind is where it will finished,
    It becomes so hard to give so much amidst repetitive. circles of sinning,

    I know its hard to belong here,
    But you are like no other,
    I feel in my heart every whimper you suffer,
    But eyes are made to spend time crying,
    Only if your willing,
    Cry when shadows are over powering,
    Cry when hollow giants play on your righteous quick bite reaction like your heart is a game,
    But I promise you can smile knowing this life is taking you the right way.

    If only our eyes met,
    I would show your heart proof of true friend,
    I would lower the stress in your semiconscious until we are so centered in our presence a smile would become the only communication that would make any sense,
    And hear we have to believe this is not life's total depth,
    Look forward with me to all that is ahead.

    Sweet dreams and rest for this night my precious friend,
    Just remember theres something in you thats not in them,
    Thrive on your uniqueness and don't ever turn your head.

    Submitted on 2007-08-09 23:21:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It reminds me of your earlier work - Abuse 2... i mean identical themes and that touching quality ....

    It seems you are talking to an oppressed child... who eventually becomes a symbol of all suffering childhood ........whose innocence is being plundered by unseen vested interests.

    I see the commentary type asked for is thoughts... so i can add that there are innumerable such children in India who are subjected to this kind of exploitation by dual forces of irresponsible parenting and heartless industrialism. .... perhaps, this malady afflicts nearly all the nations ( with the difference of degrees) .

    The hope (and consolation) offered in last two paras is precious.... it is true that every individual has something unique in him or her... and it should not remain buried there.

    Very inspring....Excellent is just a small word.
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]

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