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    dots Submission Name: Explosive Hymndots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsExplosive Hymndots
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    I'm looking at you...
    eyes veiled by
    peaceful eyelids;
    shutting out all views around you
    except Him.
    lips closed together
    and behind them is the hum
    of an explosive hymn.

    The Cross comes before anything else;
    your soul has long since departed.

    Suppressing temptation,
    I'm a cacophany of silence;
    I'm an epitaph on the grave you so willingly dug.
    My lilting voice is no match for yours.
    But let it be sung, let it be proclaimed.

    Feel my presence next to you,
    my hand will always be in yours.
    Figuratively; literally.
    It's not matter, is it?
    I'll stay until the light leaves the sky;
    I'll be there when the light leaves your eyes.




    Submitted on 2007-08-10 02:07:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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