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Author: Ghetto_King
ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4 /33 /54
Words: 330
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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a poem about my girl and the way she make me feel


You the very vision of all I’ve come too love in this short time
Like a prism your inner beauty is bright and too the world it shines
With your voice I receive instant peace in chest where demons battle angels daily
From an ice chizzeld heart you came in and save me
Through your actions and worth you make me feel like I can fly without the presence of wings
To the day I can feel your warm embrace I await the scene
The passion that fills my chest pushing against my lungs making it hard to breathe
Your trust and belief in me are the gasps of air that briefly alleviate my suffering
With every morning I awake knowing I have you self doubt leaving me
From being a outcast of family and society her now, retrieving me
With her in my life never feel like I’m walking alone
My heart has reshape itself and for her it made a home
Before I met here only brief happiness was known
Like the beat to my heart the perfect melody too its song
With your confidence, drive and ideas you help me regroup my own
As smile spread too face wit your number running across my phone
Behind every strong man there is a stronger woman
With your presence in my life I have receive something immense
A chance too show the me that everyone rarely sees and I condense
Her the Girl That Makes Me A Better Me
Her The Girl That Bring My Demons To Peace

To A.G.L

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