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    dots Submission Name: Herdots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 741
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       a poem about my girl and the way she make me feel


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    dotsHerdots
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    Her
    You the very vision of all Iíve come too love in this short time
    Like a prism your inner beauty is bright and too the world it shines
    With your voice I receive instant peace in chest where demons battle angels daily
    From an ice chizzeld heart you came in and save me
    Through your actions and worth you make me feel like I can fly without the presence of wings
    To the day I can feel your warm embrace I await the scene
    The passion that fills my chest pushing against my lungs making it hard to breathe
    Your trust and belief in me are the gasps of air that briefly alleviate my suffering
    With every morning I awake knowing I have you self doubt leaving me
    From being a outcast of family and society her now, retrieving me
    Her
    With her in my life never feel like Iím walking alone
    My heart has reshape itself and for her it made a home
    Before I met here only brief happiness was known
    Like the beat to my heart the perfect melody too its song
    With your confidence, drive and ideas you help me regroup my own
    As smile spread too face wit your number running across my phone
    Behind every strong man there is a stronger woman
    With your presence in my life I have receive something immense
    A chance too show the me that everyone rarely sees and I condense
    Her the Girl That Makes Me A Better Me
    Her The Girl That Bring My Demons To Peace

    To A.G.L







    Submitted on 2007-08-10 02:37:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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