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    dots Submission Name: Sandalwood Gorgedots

    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsSandalwood Gorgedots

    Cold serpentine towers inhabit the sky
    And the hectic twilight heart
    Fears no doom that strikes
    With the rise of the sandalwood titans

    The heartfell knights
    And the softest dreams in the grass
    Caress her starlit yet disguised heartsteps
    As would a phoenix flame lick the impetulant sea

    At a journey to the gorge amidst the silver ends of zenith

    And she takes no fright
    Of the dangerous eyes on agescarred trees
    And the masters of lullabies in the nests of their hearts
    Most dark and vigilat roads ahead through the marshes of incantation

    Some of sorrow and some monsters of gleam
    Hide from the Sun in the deepest, most abysmal Rangerwood dorms as she soaks the blackness
    And seeks her wisdom in hiding her shadow

    When the dusk opens it's arms
    To the world of starving anarchy
    She finds her frontiers end
    Inside the destiny's pools of a lover

    A secret life, a secret world
    All but a sheer utopia on small fragments
    Of life against the plagueridden story of her soul
    That takes her days to chaos and despair

    So at last the frontiers end
    Oh, dear beloved, misery infested child
    At the heart of the sandalwood gorge the frontiers end
    And much of what has happened is left to find it's peace

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      This piece is very moving, its many images are extremely vivid and unique. I think that I enjoy your pieces without the attached pictures...
    I myself sometimes use pictures for inspiration, however, I think that letting people use their own imagination makes every piece more personal and special.

    I definitely look forward to more writing from you.
    | Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by Argola | [ Reply to This ]
      Once more filled with your signature poetic phrasings...the first several stanzas are highly esoteric, even more so than usual... an excellent poem... bravo... bravo... bravo ...michael
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so much like my philosophy and thoughts :

    "A secret life, a secret world
    All but a sheer utopia on small fragments
    Of life against the plagueridden story of her soul
    That takes her days to chaos and despair"

    It is somehow weird to see my own perspective distorted, yet the essence of it so similar. I wonder how words can awake images like that, how they change your neural connections... guess I'd have to study linguistics, nlp, memetics and hermeneutics more ;))
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh,how to comment on a piece that leaves one speechless?
    Signature coinages, mind-splitting imagery. However I am beginning to think you may be right in rewriting your stuff because of repetition and unoriginality. Give stories a shot though, I wonder what happened to your 'Hell's Angels'...

    Cheers always
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]

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