Description: Idk Why I Wrote This Poem
My Feelings Have Been Very Misleading Lately
My Poetry Is No Longer Clear
Im Scared To Speak The Truth
So This is What I Wrote Instead
Death investigation -------------------------------------------
standing there dressed in black
listening to the man state the facts
she died all alone
we will take her with us
and let her family know
he takes out a knife
to cut the girl down
as that is done
a small note is found
im sorry for everything i ever said
sorry for the words
which turned to regrets
i tried my best believe i did
but nothing can stop this pain i feel
i gave you my all everthing i had
but at the end of the day
it was her you wanted back
im sorry its over im sorry i tried
i ended it this way
so you would never see me cry
the end of the note confused all that read
for written in blood said
ill see you there
the note was placed inside of a bag
signed, sealed and marked with a tag
it was time for the investigation to begin
what really happend where had she been
as soon as it started was it the end
my cause of death
a heart that wont mend
Very good, but this write needs corrections and seperate stanzas, especially concerning the note, which should be in quotations. I can see that you tried to keep with the rhymes, but rhyming isn't always important unless it's required. Below I posted an example of how it could have read:_______________________
Standing there dressed in black,
Listening to the man state the facts.
"She died all alone,
We will take her with us,
And let her family know."
He takes out a knife,
Cuts the girl down,
As that is done,
A small note is found.
"I'm sorry for everything I ever said,
Sorry for the words,
Which turned to regrets.
"I tried my best,
Believe me, I did,
But nothing can stop this pain I feel.
"I gave you my all,
Everthing I had,
But at the end of the day,
It was her you wanted back.
"I'm sorry its over,
I'm sorry I tried,
I ended it this way,
So you would never see me cry."
The end of the note,
Confused all that read,
For written in blood it said,
"I'll see you there."
The note was placed inside of a bag,
Signed, sealed and marked with a tag,
It was time for the investigation to begin.
What really happend,
Where had she been,
As soon as it started,
Was it the end?