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    dots Submission Name: Now and thendots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNow and thendots
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    I remember
    When the world was still good
    People didn't smoke all that much
    And if the did it was legal
    I remember when sex wasn't such a big issue
    That you could've walked up to a girl
    And it wasn't flirting
    I remember when talking to parents was actually talking
    And they responded without a closed mind
    I remeber all of that
    And alot more

    But now

    The world's fucked
    People roll stuff anywhere
    elementary schools , bathrooms , best friends houses
    Now sex is importnat , at too young an age
    14 , 13 , even less at times
    I can't even talk without someone saying something stupid
    Now my parents won't even listen without yelling at something
    They wont agree on any of the shit I say
    Now it's like this
    And alot worse

    But I can't talk about this
    I'm too young
    According to my family and friends
    I should live in ignorance
    Just like them
    The only problem
    One of the things they want me to ignore

    The shit that makes me happy




    Submitted on 2007-08-10 11:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is really good. i agree with what you say, about things being different than they used to be. and sex IS way over-done for young kids...i have a kid i babysit who's in 2nd grade and they have sex-ed classes about birth control and condoms...that is sad...

    i like the awareness you raise in this. the message is clear and perfectly understood. good job!

    ~ lizzy
    | Posted on 2009-07-01 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      DAM another great post how the hell does this only have one Comment WTF. WOW this is amazing I love how you compared it all and its all so true and I don't see anything that needs to be fix I feel everything is great I feel adding anything would just make it too much! Once again great write wow

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      THis is good, I like the comparison and even though you're talking about the way the world once was and the way it is now between the two, I also took it as the difference between a childs inicont look upon life and how it changes and you see the truth of it all when you get older. I agree with you completely in this piece though. Good piece, keep on writing.


    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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