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    dots Submission Name: Song Birddots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Kind of like a beatnik rap thingy?!?!?!

    Happy Day & Love to Share ES

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    dotsSong Birddots

    Song bird
    rarely singing
    Colored notes
    Emmanating hues
    Goddess in Nature
    Heart open
    find clues
    no headlines
    morning news

    Float aloft
    Fly Free
    No stress
    Let "IT" BE
    Become; engage

    Not race, sex,
    or age
    Share tHE
    Embrace Rage
    Within ALL
    Divine Sage
    Painted picture
    written page
    Free "self"
    from seemed

    Time - does not
    in Spirit

    Submitted on 2007-08-10 13:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I always enjoy the cheerful, upbeat nature of your poetry as well as the lovely visuals. Being the bird lover that I am, this one got my mind going on how soon our migratory birds will be coming through the area. As you can tell, I'm still enjoying the essence of this poem! Happy Spring, Sharon :-)
    | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi i guess welcome bak this is like all your other posts very peaceful

    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany, your message came through loud and clear. I am still trying to decide how much this chopped rhyme scheme formula of yours works for me. It is certainly efficient but I'm not totally enamored with the flow of it...but that's probably just me.
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      A great message here-- The symbol of the song bird singing in coloured notes is wonderful as it represents the unity of two diverse arts--music and painting.

    "Heart open
    Find Clues"

    :) Nice choice of words (:

    And the last line:

    Time- does not
    in spirit

    is a sweet and pretty creative expression of the "Unity of Being"
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm impressed, I'm not much one for inspirationals and good happy feelings but that considerably lightened my day, only one thing on line 3 of stanza 3 was it supposed to be "THE" or "tHE"? But like I said it was wonderfully light and had some very good imagery with it. Nice job.

    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads like a song of freedom! It is light and inspirational in it's mood, and gives one a feeling of peace when reading it! Nice work, Tiffany!
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was put together very well. The flow was magnificent and I love the hippie feel to it. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Miss Haely
    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      The linnet could not have sung this any better than you.

    Flow and theme are perfectly matched.

    What a busy and clever girl you are !

    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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