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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Deserve Thisdots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 533



    Description:
       A song i just wrote, 11th August, 3am
    this comes from my heart, it may not be good, but it brought me to tears cause of God's gracious love


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    dotsI Don't Deserve Thisdots
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    Verse:
    I've walked the walk of men and lies
    I've pushed You away too many times
    And i dont see no reasons why
    That You should forgive my sinful life

    Pre-Chorus:
    By Your grace
    You love unfailing
    I found the hope that i need,
    By Your love
    I find my rest
    And now i am complete.

    Chorus: X2
    I donít deserve this
    I donít deserve any part of it
    I donít deserve this
    But you gave it to me anyway




    Submitted on 2007-08-10 14:04:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey Den,
    came by wanting to say thanks for the lovely music you sent me the other day, and clicked on this. Glad I did. (and oh look, you request praise..). Hm, I'm sad I can't get a tune to this, (imagines something of the rock sort) but that's fine, sometimes lyrics are powerful enough to whack you in the face. No, they really do.

    quite sincere, as always, sad I never have anything new to say to you.

    The last line should be : "But You gave it to me anyway."

    Cheers, God Bless
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-08-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Beautifully written
    You captured The Love one feels when they invite The Lord into their hearts perfectly
    I would Love to hear this matched with music
    EXCELLENT JOB!!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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