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    dots Submission Name: Life After Youdots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 357
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsLife After Youdots
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    You got a girlfriend, I got left alone
    No one to call my own, No more talks
    No more one word conversations
    No more you!

    My life fell apart with one talk
    I was no longer yours
    She made you happy, but so did I
    I had to learn to live on my own
    No longer could I turn to you

    Since you met her all we do is fight
    Your so mad at me and I donít know why
    You never talk to me
    All you do is change topics

    Moving on was hard
    Harder than I thought it would be
    Now I depend on me and only me
    I have to stand on my own two feet
    While I put my broken hear back together

    Life after you seems so low
    No reason to get up in the morning
    No reason to smile anymore
    No reason to laugh

    Each day is harder than the last
    Slow to get up easy to fall down
    No more appetite, no more good
    Wondering through the dark,
    Where did my light go?

    Life after you is dull
    No more laughter rings in my ears
    No more smiles on your face
    All that is left is anger
    And hurtful words from you

    It wasnít enough to leave,
    It wasnít enough to take it all
    Nothing was enough
    Till I was under it all

    Each day I pretend Iím okay
    Telling my friends Iím over you
    I say I donít love you, I say you didnít hurt me
    All I say is a lie to cover my broken life

    Life after you seems unfair
    Nothings the same, nothings right
    All that I knew has gone away
    All that was is now what isnít

    Life after you brings anger
    At your heartless actions
    Life after you brings hurt
    As my heart breaks again
    Life after you brings tears
    As I cry for what was lost

    But most of all
    Life after you brings no more you
    As you and I go in different directions
    Because itís life after you.




    Submitted on 2007-08-10 20:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, a lover's lamant....sad and poignant, acutally reads more like a prose poem, but still finely done throughout... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ...michael
    | Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Um, it is an awesome poem. The only thing is, I couldn't feel the anger and sadness that you were feeling. I know a person who has gone through this type of thing could relate, but not everyone has, so they can't really feel the emotions. In my opinion, thats the only thing you need to work on. I can only speak for myself. Other than that, its awesome.

    "Thats all."
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]


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