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No Panty Lines

Author: Peggy Paris
ASL Info:    61/F/USA
Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747 /570 /167
Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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No Panty Lines

She dressed to nines, and, quite genteel,
Our lady was no clown.
In satin gown,
She strolled the town,
A woman of renown.
In grandest style,
She’d wink and smile;
You’d never see her frown.
She loved the men
And had a yen
To charm them upside down.

She slipped and fell upon a peel;
Her legs flew in the air.
Upon a dare,
A few did stare
At views beyond compare.
Banana goop,
A howl and whoop,
A lady in despair…
But oversight
Was her sad plight;
Her bottom was quite bare.

The last I’d heard, she’d lost her zeal
For dressing to the nines.
The latest signs
In her designs
Seem set on trouser lines,
But I’m amazed
She wasn’t fazed
How underwear combines
To cover that
Of which men chat
and sunlight never shines.

Submitted on 2007-08-10 23:41:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Friggen hilarious, you've really perked up my day. You've got style.

Christmas wishes x
| Posted on 2007-12-13 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  Yep, you had me laughing as I was visualizing the embarassing situation that this refined lady found herself in. Why is it that thoughts of Britney Spears came racing into my head...Oh Well, that's another story for another time.
| Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  HA HA .... ooo my... this was deffinately a funny and well written
Your ryhme scheme flowed and the overall visuals were fantastic
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
  this was freakin hilarious as well as well-written.
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  This made me laugh and even feel a little embarrased for the poor lady. Is this based on a true story or just something you made up? Either way, great job putting it into poetry form. While reading it, I felt like I was there.

Bottom line (no pun intended) great job! I like the comedy of it, you don't read many poems like that anymore. Keep up the good work, I hope to read more great poems from you in the future!
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha! Delightful, whimsical, and funny! But, I feel sorry for the genteel lady who slipped and fell! I wish I had been there to help her regain her footing and her composure; and, I wouldn't have gawked at her bare bottom (like hell, I wouldn't)! You've been on a roll Sharon, and this was delightful in it's amusing and entertaining story!
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  hahahaha i can relate but i'm not saying a word about it...this is funny Sharon you sure have alot of different thoughts coming out of you

The only thing i would do if this belonged to me is put a word here

its in your first line of your first stanza...

She dressed to nines, and, quite genteel

instead of that maybe put this????

She dressed to the nines, and, quite genteel

i think if you add the word the it flows better

thankYou for the laugh you brought back something funny from my teenage years....
i enjoyed the read well done Sharon...
| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]

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