Description: yes, i know Harlequin doesnt have an E at the end and that for those of you who know what a Harlequin is, this is far from describing one, but humor me on this, i added the E and made up this character for me novel. so here she is, in all her brazen glory.
The Harlequine -------------------------------------------
When the demons sleep, she comes.
Wrapped in the chains of her imprisonment
Snaking tattoos like black ribbon
Forever marking her for what she is
A fallen angel
The hand of death
Mistress of the night
Only Loki himself would dare to love her
The devil is not so brave
Mute words escape her lips
A deadly sweet taste of breath
Beckoning you to partake in her sinful pleasure
Her kiss of ice will stop your heart
Before her black dagger takes
Your last bit of life.
She reminds me of a female death personified, or death incarnate. I would advise branching even more into character depth and give her a more detailed description. Add the aspects of evil, death, apathy, cold and ruthless to each of her physical details and let her reflect truely a unique character rather than the basic thought. Just by reading the first few lines I automaticly asigned her a generic look.
Submission Name: The Harlequine
