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    dots Submission Name: Rhythm Method Shabby morning Glorydots
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    Author: H.Redd
    ASL Info:    28/m/ lake charles
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 35/31/51
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 110
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    Bytes: 885



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       The hope!


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    dotsRhythm Method Shabby morning Glorydots
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    Poverty-stricken urbanity's
    a prolific source of unhallowed ignoranace.
    The rich get's richer,
    and the poor makes babies.
    Lotto wisher a rainbow of ghetto's and
    trailer park's for the common nigga,
    food stamp's blitzer.
    The padre sale's god wisdom for tide's
    to buy hope.
    I call it whimpering, they call it hosannaing
    to god.
    Or just mybe it is the offspring of religion
    prostitution worshiping the dead beat's.
    As the political palaver,
    steps out and from the million dollar
    haberdasher on to the grounds
    of unreality's he is refreshed.
    Then a truism Red Breast decanted it's
    wasted on the head of
    the governance pimp.
    He touch it and smelled it,
    Smell's like nouveau neocon sh*t.




    Submitted on 2007-08-11 02:00:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it. Actually, I couldn't have done better myself. I could feel the raw power. You were speaking some true stuff, man. More power to you.

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    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by Kiddo | [ Reply to This ]


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