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    dots Submission Name: Mind Fuckeddots
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    Author: SammySueYou
    ASL Info:    23/f/nm
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90/78/30
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 900
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    Bytes: 567



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       Fucked from the toes to the head....


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    dotsMind Fuckeddots
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    It started when I was only three and my toes went numb,
    they weren't supposed to be touched the way that he did.
    At the age of five I had already lost all of my feelings below the waist,
    I wasn't supposed to be looked at the way he did, I was too young for love.
    At the age of fifteen I lost feeling from my heart down,
    I wasn't supposed to be used the way that he used me.
    Now at the age of nineteen I lost all feeling from my head to my toes,
    I wasn't suppose to be fucked the way they fucked me.




    Submitted on 2007-08-11 11:16:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats hugely sad dude. but i liked the way you wrote it, matter of factly..instead of PITY ME NOW!!! very impressive.
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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