Mind Fucked

Author: SammySueYou ASL Info:    23/f/nm Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90 /78 /30 Words: 107

Class/Type: Poetry /I am dead inside Total Views: 1064 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 567

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Mind Fucked

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It started when I was only three and my toes went numb, they weren't supposed to be touched the way that he did. At the age of five I had already lost all of my feelings below the waist, I wasn't supposed to be looked at the way he did, I was too young for love. At the age of fifteen I lost feeling from my heart down, I wasn't supposed to be used the way that he used me. Now at the age of nineteen I lost all feeling from my head to my toes, I wasn't suppose to be fucked the way they fucked me.

Submitted on 2007-08-11 11:16:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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thats hugely sad dude. but i liked the way you wrote it, matter of factly..instead of PITY ME NOW!!! very impressive.

| Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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