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    dots Submission Name: Divined from Flightdots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 892
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    Bytes: 125



    Description:
       mythological.


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    dotsDivined from Flightdots
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    Daedalus pushes Perdix,
    poised to be the better

    One becomes the partridge
    and Envy lives forever




    Submitted on 2007-08-11 16:08:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mmmm... what a tasty terse poem. I like the simplicity full of meaning woven from mythology which adds to the context without you having to cram a story into the short piece. Very well done, why not throw a period at the end to show completion of the story?

    Also, I would rewrite this poem in latin if I were you, even if you don't know latin it won't be too hard given the shortness of it. Then it would be perfect.
    | Posted on 2007-08-11 00:00:00 | by yonkit | [ Reply to This ]


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