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Submission Name: For Everlasting dots

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Author:	obsidiandreams
Elite Ratio:	3.54 - 168/211/103
Words:	26

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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For Everlasting dots

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Life by limelight
with a broken heart
Sing bittersweetly
how life restarts
Then take my hand
and wash away
Every instance
of your memory

Submitted on 2007-08-11 16:25:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is short an sweet.
It tells a story.
Keep it up.
<3 Crescent
| Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.