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    dots Submission Name: For Everlastingdots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 168/211/103
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFor Everlastingdots
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    Life by limelight
    with a broken heart
    Sing bittersweetly
    how life restarts
    Then take my hand
    and wash away
    Every instance
    of your memory





    Submitted on 2007-08-11 16:25:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is short an sweet.
    It tells a story.
    Keep it up.
    <3 Crescent
    | Posted on 2007-08-20 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]


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