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Author: emoxday
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Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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Ehh, I would tell you the description but it would probably riun the feel? Yeah, take it as you like. Enjoy.


Me



I want good things to happen,
everyday I wish;
everyday I want ,
something good to happen
If not me, someone else

I want everyone to shine like the sun,
I want the moon to not feel empty,
but whole and full;

I want you to not feel empty
nor sad anymore,
I want to wipe away your tears
and tell you that many people love you too

I want your sadness to go away
I want you to shine like the sun
I don't want you to wonder why you're here
you're here for me

I want you to know you have a purpose
And aren't here 'cause of coincidence
I want you to know you have a purpose

I don't want to see you cry at night, no more
I don't want you to dwell on other peoples problems, like they're your own
I want you to be happy
and not wonder why you should be

I don't want other people to hurt you
Even though I can't always protect you
I want to protect you with all my might

I want you to shine like the sun
I want you to be happy, and not wonder why
I want to be with you




Submitted on 2007-08-12 01:25:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really good, the only thing is for lyrics don't try to use "I" so much in the piece it takes the meaning away lyrics are for the ppl and have them more to realate but u got the point across very well. Flow was from there beging to end.

Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good job

Max
| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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