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Sticks & stones

Author: Poetic_tragedy6
ASL Info:    25/F/OR
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Words: 146
Class/Type: Poetry /
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a poem about the shit talkers out there...

Sticks & stones

Sticks & stones...
The usual phrase.
Trying to ignore them
Not listening to what they say.

Their words cut
Like a knife on soft skin
Only judging what they see
Ignoring what's within

Backstabbers & liars
You think you can trust
Deceiving you, using you
Leaving you in the dust

Playing their games
Messing with your head
Starting their rumors
Nothing good can be said

Bringing you down
Is all the care for
Until your all used up
And you have nothing more

So you walk your path
No one can walk it for you
Mistakes can be made
It's what all humans do

Pointing the fingers
Trying to hurt your pride
But who cares what they say?
You will always shine

Sticks & stones...
Everyone knows the phrase
Ignoring their words
Knowing you'll be okay...

Submitted on 2007-08-12 04:12:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like this poem! It hit so close to home with me as I read it. I can relate in more ways than you could know.
I like how you start out by saying all the sad stuff and then in the end you say, "knowing you'll be okay". It gives me a feeling of hope.
In the 5th stanza, 2nd line, is the word "the" supposed to be "they"?
Great job with this one, keep up the good work! I hope to read more from you.

| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
  This is Really good. I think this could be better i was expecting somthing to just pop out and me make me say wow but it never happened. Maybe try so more imagery in the piece Like what u did in this stanza

"Their words cut
Like a knife on soft skin
Only judging what they see
Ignoring what's within"

Other than that this was really good piece I like it alot

Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work

| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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