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Sticks & stones... The usual phrase. Trying to ignore them Not listening to what they say. Their words cut Like a knife on soft skin Only judging what they see Ignoring what's within Backstabbers & liars You think you can trust Deceiving you, using you Leaving you in the dust Playing their games Messing with your head Starting their rumors Nothing good can be said Bringing you down Is all the care for Until your all used up And you have nothing more So you walk your path No one can walk it for you Mistakes can be made It's what all humans do Pointing the fingers Trying to hurt your pride But who cares what they say? You will always shine Sticks & stones... Everyone knows the phrase Ignoring their words Knowing you'll be okay... |
I really like this poem! It hit so close to home with me as I read it. I can relate in more ways than you could know. I like how you start out by saying all the sad stuff and then in the end you say, "knowing you'll be okay". It gives me a feeling of hope. In the 5th stanza, 2nd line, is the word "the" supposed to be "they"? Great job with this one, keep up the good work! I hope to read more from you. ~mysterious~ | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ] | This is Really good. I think this could be better i was expecting somthing to just pop out and me make me say wow but it never happened. Maybe try so more imagery in the piece Like what u did in this stanza | "Their words cut Like a knife on soft skin Only judging what they see Ignoring what's within" Other than that this was really good piece I like it alot Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work Max | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ] | |