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    dots Submission Name: Sticks & stonesdots

    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       a poem about the shit talkers out there...

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    dotsSticks & stonesdots

    Sticks & stones...
    The usual phrase.
    Trying to ignore them
    Not listening to what they say.

    Their words cut
    Like a knife on soft skin
    Only judging what they see
    Ignoring what's within

    Backstabbers & liars
    You think you can trust
    Deceiving you, using you
    Leaving you in the dust

    Playing their games
    Messing with your head
    Starting their rumors
    Nothing good can be said

    Bringing you down
    Is all the care for
    Until your all used up
    And you have nothing more

    So you walk your path
    No one can walk it for you
    Mistakes can be made
    It's what all humans do

    Pointing the fingers
    Trying to hurt your pride
    But who cares what they say?
    You will always shine

    Sticks & stones...
    Everyone knows the phrase
    Ignoring their words
    Knowing you'll be okay...

    Submitted on 2007-08-12 04:12:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem! It hit so close to home with me as I read it. I can relate in more ways than you could know.
    I like how you start out by saying all the sad stuff and then in the end you say, "knowing you'll be okay". It gives me a feeling of hope.
    In the 5th stanza, 2nd line, is the word "the" supposed to be "they"?
    Great job with this one, keep up the good work! I hope to read more from you.

    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ]
      This is Really good. I think this could be better i was expecting somthing to just pop out and me make me say wow but it never happened. Maybe try so more imagery in the piece Like what u did in this stanza

    "Their words cut
    Like a knife on soft skin
    Only judging what they see
    Ignoring what's within"

    Other than that this was really good piece I like it alot

    Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work

    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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