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    dots Submission Name: Today Societydots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just annoyed at the sterotypes ppl have

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    dotsToday Societydots

    Today society
    Crying is something left up to the females
    I disagree
    Crying is for all kinds
    Males, females, whites, blacks, short, tall, skinny, and fat

    Tears are the most powerful emotion,
    It only shows that youre human.
    Tears are like crystals, so beautiful,
    As a warm spring day watching the sunset
    With champagne, rose pedals, chocolate covered strawberry, candle light, and an Engadgement ring to purpose to the angel that lay next to you, on the outskirts of the cities

    Let it rain
    Tears sending shivers down a spine
    Knowing these tears are mine and only mine
    Somthing that can't be taken away and will never go get up and leave you behind.

    Submitted on 2007-08-12 12:53:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey, i like this one!!! i agree with you tears are the most power-ful-est...especually think of all the emotion behind them.
    i also how you discibe tars in your poem:

    "Tears are like crystals, so beautiful,
    As a warm spring day watching the sunset
    With champagne, rose pedals, chocolate covered strawberry, candle light, and an Engadgement ring to purpose to the angel that lay next to you, on the outskirts of the cities"

    i thought it was a very good write!!! keep it up!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, I like this one. Though I thought you were going to write about people without manners or something along those lines. You didn't and it still sounded good. Usually when I think of tears I think of sorrow or something bad. But you wrote about tears of happiness, maybe sad tears too but it still sounded beautiful. I forgot about tears of happiness.
    Maybe on stanza 2 near the end you're stretching it a little bit(Just my opinion). But it still is good.
    And I guess when you do cry, you realize that you are human and have feelings too. Heh, I don't know where that came from. Good work. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-08-13 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      There's certainly plenty of reasons to cry in today's society. I find crying a relief at times but realize it seems too much reserved for the females. I'm not certain if that fault can be placed on parenting or on other men's expectation that toughness excludes tears. In either event, your poem got me thinking. There are a couple misspelling that can be easily fixed (propose, line 11, and something, next to last line). Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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