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    dots Submission Name: dark cloudsdots
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    Author: vencix
    ASL Info:    17/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    1.42 - 14/78/50
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 107
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 883



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       i was looking at all I've done with my life and all of this poem just came to me. i hope you all enjoy it.


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    today i sit under a tree writing you a letter. even though you have broke my heart.

    As I watch the dark stormy clouds roll in. I continue to write. As lightening cracks in the distance.

    I continue to write as i starts to rain I find more cover under the tree. know that it's not safe i finish writing the letter.

    As i put the pencil down and fold the letter to put it in my pocket. the lightening crackles and strikes the tree.

    As i watch it comes's down. Then i close my eyes and see your face.

    As you hear what has happened to me you pick up the note and read.


    "to my love to my angel I shall forever love you"


    As you cry and fold the letter and hold it close and walk away for under that tree i stay and forever miss you.




    Submitted on 2007-08-12 15:59:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...this is sad. Your write a letter to your love telling her everything (that you might not have been able tell her before your time was up) and while you lay asleep...she reads this later, and holds it as a constant reminder that you were real.

    Heartbreaking...!
    | Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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